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He's Walking in Gardens by ~sweetcapris:iconsweetcapris:



Lyrics float through overcast skies,
Measuring a summer’s day.

Turning away, I close my stinging eyes.

--

“There, to the left…
Your other left,” he chuckled.

On dirty knees, my cousin and I scooted on the ground.
I lifted a dark green leaf, rough between my fingers

And held up what I’d found.
He squinted for a better look and bit the tube at his mouth;
His chair moved forward.

“Now that there is one FINE cucumber.
Those plants are thirsty, though,
So you girls go ahead and get ‘em something to drink.”

My cousin jumped up and clenched the metal at the hose’s end,
But sprayed me first
When I laughed as it twisted in her hands.

He watched and smiled as we danced
Barefoot in the rainbow mist.

--

They played Tangerine
as they lowered him into the ground.
The dirt was cool and muddy now;
It clumped at our shoes.

She and I stood, laced by clammy hands
As a guitar riff weaved through the air and furrowed our brows.
Her tears upon my shoulder, she whispered,
“He’s walking in gardens.”

Shuffling my foot through the dirt,
I lifted my eyes to hers and smiled.

“I know.”
©2008-2009 ~sweetcapris
:iconsweetcapris:

Author's Comments

Another tribute to a loved one... this one to my uncle Mike who, though he was a quadriplegic the majority of his life, that is, paralyzed from the neck down, was also the best darn gardener I've ever known. My cousin Ali and I often helped him pick his veggies and water the plants and such.

Anyway, sorry for another sad one :[ , it's the winter I say. It's personal, sure, but I'm manning up and asking for some feedback. I think there's something good in this one, but with subjects like these it's hard to sort through emotions to get something on paper, and harder yet to boil down something so complex into words.

Some things I considered: Mike's passion for gardening, his ability to churn the same love in others, and "Tangerine" by Led Zeppelin, his favorite song of all time, played at his funeral in 2006.

Anyway, be well, guys...
hoping everyone is staying warm.

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:iconmissmissa07:
This was amazing, Cassie. It evoked many emotions within me, and I am honestly about to cry now. You are great with words and I honestly can't think of a single suggestion to this one. It seems that, while writing about subjects this personal are difficult, they also bring out the most amazing poetry since they touch the very depths of the heart. I loved how you made something which would typically be viewed as simply tragic (paralelization) into something which can be beautiful. Although your uncle could not move much, he seems like an amazing character who truly did spread love to each person he met.

--
I've seen the best of love, the best of hate,
The best reward is earned,
I've paid for every single word I've ever said.
:iconanedz:
Its very pretty. The explanation helped alot (though thats probably not what you want to hear) to clarify the meaning. I really, really like it though.

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"At a very early period she had apprehended instinctively the dual life- that outward existence which conforms, the inward life which questions" - The Awakening by Kate Chopin
:iconl0stwhispers:
Wow, that's a lovely story. :heart: You really brought out the emotions in this one. =) I'm glad you had some awesome memories with your uncle. :hug:

--
You don't know me.
So don't act like you do.
Don't ask me either,
'Cause I too don't have a clue.

... Evelyn ...
:iconamhuelskamp:
thanks for the tears. they were good ones.

good poem cassie. im sure mike is smiling up in heaven right now.

he still loves you, you know.

--
...you can love someone with all you heart, for all the right reasons, and in a moment they can chose to walk away, love them anyway...
:iconthecoolbeane:
A really great piece of writing. Nothing extra and nothing missing. I've seldom gotten so much story from so few words. <3

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2 pockets full
:iconsweetcapris:
:hug: Thank you so much, Melissa. I can't tell you how happy it makes me to know that you understood exactly what I was trying to portray. And yeah, I honestly have to think there's something positive in all things in life. meh, anyway, I love you. That is all.

--
AFOOT and light-hearted, I take to the open road.
:iconsweetcapris:
I figured a little explanation could never hurt.. but yes, thank you very very much.

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AFOOT and light-hearted, I take to the open road.
:iconsweetcapris:
Thank you, I really do have good memories. I'm glad this one touched you.

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AFOOT and light-hearted, I take to the open road.
:iconsweetcapris:
haha, aww. you make me cry just with this comment! Gosh. ok, ok, we're even now :] lol
:heart:

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AFOOT and light-hearted, I take to the open road.

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